![]() You do a fantastic job giving great details about how their bodies age but it'll be strengthened by descriptions of those same body part young. I would love a bit more detailed descriptions of what their bodies look like as young women. If I were to offer you feedback on how to improve the section you've written here it would be: I just got a chance to read it tonight and I liked it a lot! I really hope you continue with the story because it seems like it's heading in a fun place! Your description of Chie and Yukiko as old women were fantastic - it definitely makes me excited to hear what the other women in the group look like. Sorry its taken me a few days to comment on this.
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